After working in her current position for three years, TeamSugar member cents4dollars is ready for a new challenge. She's found a couple of awesome positions and is excited to apply, so she posted her résumé in my Résumé Remedy group for advice on how it could be improved. My two cents are below; feel free to add your own feedback in the comments!
- Remove the excess. The quality of her experience is clouded by the crowded resume — there's simply too much going on for a hiring manager to focus on the important details. I would re-format the resume to show the name and contact information at the top (and reduce the font size for the name). As is, the format leaves me wondering where to look first. The other sidebar items stating her language skills and licensed product experience get lost. Move these items in the body of the resume.
- Rewrite the professional summary. I understand where she's going with the professional summary, but the way it's currently written is confusing. If you deem it necessary, write a concise statement that incorporates your breadth of experience and would entice the hiring manager to read on. In this case, a summary of qualifications placed between the name and professional experience could be the best way to showcase the specific skills you've obtained working in the industry, along with your language skills.
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Get more specific. As is, a hiring manager will learn your current job responsibilities, but he or she won't be able to tell how effective you are. Employers want to see that you can bring results. Revisit each line under your current job and think about making them less about your duties and more about your accomplishments.
Delete the irrelevant. Only include details that are relevant to the job you want. So, for the assistant camp director position, it's unnecessary to include the line that begins "planned daily activities" because it's redundant and irrelevant. Move the most impressive line, "Doubled enrollment for splash camp over course of 2003 summer with creative daily activities and active parent communication" to appear first. Perform the same trimming technique to the publicity internship.
Clean up tenses. Edit your tenses: If you're referring to any job that isn't your current position, the action verb should be in the past.