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Resume Remedy 2008-05-14 13:05:04

Recent Graduate Résumé, Remedied

TeamSugar memeber fashionhore has just graduated and is looking for her first job out of school, ideally in print journalism. She's hoping to make herself stand out from the other recent graduates, so she shared her résumé in my Résumé Remedy group. I think she already has an edge against her competition — she has a lot of relevant experience in her field, while many college students aren't sure what direction they want to take and explore various unrelated internships. The trick is to leverage all of her great experience and showcase the varied skills she learned through each job.

Check out my advice, and of course your own suggestions are welcome! Just

  1. Overview: Before we get into specifics, the general organization needs a little polishing. If she's going to include an objective, which I don't think is always necessary or beneficial, it must be more than letting the employer know that she wants a full-time job with them. Stating the obvious as the introduction to her résumé isn't making a good first impression. The qualifications section seems out of place, and it would be better to include those pieces throughout the résumé. She may consider changing the "employment" section label to experience — I think it has a more professional feel to it.
  2. Feature the jobs, not the dates: Employers are looking to measure an applicant's qualifications, so she needs to rearrange the job titles and dates and introduce each experience with the title that she held even if it's "intern." The same goes for the education section.
  3. Formalize: The résumé feels casual to me. Pay attention to details like spelling out Bachelor of Arts, capitalizing her areas of interest in school (Journalism not journalism), and extending each of her experiences into bullet points instead of two lines that feature short factual sentences. The goal is to draw the employer's eye to her capabilities, and if they're not separated it's likely the employer will miss something important.
  4. Get specific: She made the most of her time during college and has plenty of relevant experience that would be impressive to a potential employer in her field, but she needs to divulge more about her time spent and the tools she used. For example, in her current position she "Writes various dance articles while on deadline" which is obviously important to working in print journalism. But she needs to make those points really hit home by adding depth.
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TidalWave TidalWave 9 years
I do my Experience like this: Web Developer - Sircon Okemos, MI - 07/05 to 05/06 --Created electronic documents from hard copies --Maintained documents for a web application Honestly, unless you are working for some huge corporation, the job just wants to see what you did and what you can do for them. You have to use formatting! Bullets and resume action words and appropriate orders. I definitely agree with Savvy that this is a very casual resume. Also, leave off the cashier. And I am not sure you need the second college on there if you did not graduate from there. I spent my freshmen year at a different college than I graduated from and I just never mention it in my resume at all. If someone asks why I only went to a university for 3 years, I explain during the interview.
emalove emalove 9 years
Ah, I remember these days...I was so anxious about finding a job after graduation and I wanted my resume to be PERFECT. I have several of my professors and the career center at my college check it over and give me suggestions.
ayanaphil ayanaphil 9 years
Great stuff! I just graduated on Saturday and I'm hitting the pavement hard looking for an Advertising or Marketing position. Congrats and good luck, fashionhore.
MindayH MindayH 9 years
Definitely use bullet points - but also include how you have done researching (what tools and methods) and what databases you have used. Lot's of companies will take your resume and enter into a database. A recruiter will then search throught the database using keywords, sometimes basic and sometimes really specific. So include as much as possible, that will really make your resume stick out the most.
fashionhore fashionhore 9 years
Thank you Savvy and everyone else for your comments. I really like the bullet points idea because I think it will make me look more qualified and it may stand out from other applicants! Good luck to you too syako.
bellaressa bellaressa 9 years
Great tips everyone. I wish that when the resumes are featured, maybe we can have a follow-up.
shanimalcracker shanimalcracker 9 years
I would definitely make sure everything is in the same tense even if some jobs are from the past and one is your current job.
Smart-Living Smart-Living 9 years
Excellent point, syako! I love that tip :)
syako syako 9 years
yea a tip is to get out your AP style book and make sure everything is by AP rules. I'm sure if an editor is looking at a resume with tons of AP errors, he/she will most likely do this :oy: (I'm not saying that she has these errors, just in general it's good rule of thumb) (note to self, do this on your own resume!) ;) Good luck fashion!
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