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Resume Remedy 2008-05-23 11:29:08

Fresh Out of College Résumé, Remedied

TeamSugar member mstinalin is graduating from college and needs to get her résumé ready to send to potential employers, so she's shared it in my Résumé Remedy group. I can't tell you how many times I sent my résumé to my sister and brother-in-law to edit for me when I was graduating, and I'm sure many of you had input from family and friends when you were a new grad. What do you say ladies, time to pay it forward?

  1. Remove the high-school education: Even if high-school graduation seems like it was just yesterday, employers really don't care about a high-school diploma when you have a college degree.

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  1. Clean up the grammar: If you're still working in a particular position, you need to write in the present tense. So you "handle" the money transactions, not "handled." Also, add punctuation after each line of experience.
  2. Come up with some new action words. As it stands, there are only five action words used to introduce each line of work experience, and there are 11 lines total. This is definitely something that should be remedied — there are plenty of sources online that provide lists of appropriate action words for résumés in particular. Using repetitive action words is fine if it's done once or twice, but when you're just starting out and don't have a lengthy résumé try to repeat as little as possible.
  3. Rearrange your duties and make them stand out: Instead of introducing her current position with her store opening and closing duties, she should place her experience of training new employees and conflict resolution first. Those are the skills that will make you desirable to a potential employer because they could transfer to another job. Rearrange each job with this in mind. Also, add some meat! How many employees did you train? What kind of conflicts did you resolve? Did you effectively assist customers and establish relationships with them to the point where you established a new standard of customer service? Or did you just assist them? Tell the truth but use descriptive words and experiences so that employers will know what you can offer them.
  4. Try to leverage those language skills: That mstinalin is fluent in Cantonese and Mandarin will be a huge draw for employers. These are not easy languages to learn. Depending on the necessity in particular industries, many employers will find this very attractive in a new employee. Did you ever use your knowledge of other languages to help customers? If so, definitely include it on your résumé.
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mstinalin mstinalin 9 years
Thanks Savvy! I'll be sure to use your advice!
drinkerofh2o drinkerofh2o 9 years
I was advised to add "excel with both written and oral communication" in my resume or cover letter. I think that phrase is appropriate for most work experience, and apparently it's actually a key phrase searched for by employers. The more you know.
shanimalcracker shanimalcracker 9 years
I think that the high school could be helpful, but in most cases, it's probably just a space waster.
beingtazim beingtazim 9 years
i like your suggestion to emphasize language skills! good idea!
MindayH MindayH 9 years
I am going to have to disagree with Savvy on the High School omission, especially if you are applying to jobs that are local to where you went to high school. When hiring someone new to the workforce, having a manager or even a strong employee that also went to the school, could be the small detail that secures you an interview, and you are still at the stage in your resume life where there isn't that much meat to it. Entry-level positions require people with good soft skills, and a strong foundation to build on. Emphasizing customer service/people skills is important if you are looking into sales, account management, and pretty much most professions. I am not suggesting putting in cliche resume words like "proactive" and "hardworking" - but you could probably add a few bullet points in that will show that you have a great work ethic.
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